dead man walking

[wytchcroft]

could have been that
dead man walking
turning to gold
shaking loose
that Lazarus lump

turning to gold
could have been that
new world, new planet
some plateau
some time

could have been that
sunrise and the cities
on a hot wave of neon
somewhere strange

electrical oceans
in which we bathe

like a dream
science fiction
dead man walking
with hands and rays
drifting into the future
on the back of the days

these hands
held their promise
could have been that
restless amazed.

Comments

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

Adore this. The repetition really works for me, especially "could have been that".

What I love most though is this expression, "restless amazed". I felt it and it left me breathless. :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

wow that was quick! thank you :))
this was just a doodle, sometimes no sense makes the most sense, to me :))

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

I like *doodles*. I tend to partake in them, as well. :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

ps - i haven't had a chance to catch up with everyone today, but i'll be dropping in on you tomorrow evening, see you then :))

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

You are too kind, my friend. Thank you. :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

pish! it will be my pleasure! :)))

[stoshagownozad.livejournal.com]

lile in Metropolis!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

yes, yes! :)))

[reginaclarejane.livejournal.com]

hey! really cool poem, my friend! i loved the futuristic feel of it- and this line in particular..."shaking loose
that Lazarus lump"- that is brill, sir nic...
this one goes into my secret stash of favorites...;)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

thank you my friend! :))

[java-fiend.livejournal.com]

I really like this one. I love that 5th stanza most of all. Really well done.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

cheers! :))

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

love it :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

that makes it worth the posting :))

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

sorry i'm so far behind with my comments. you had a poem posted a month or two ago that was especially brilliant. i will look for it again and comment soon.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

truthfully, i don't give a f--k about your comments, i DO give a f--k about YOU. it's just nice to know you're there, silly :))

*HUGE HUGS*

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

private reply sent :)))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

and i sent you a young Lance Corporal.

heh heh. ;))

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

oooh! yummy! does he look like david tennant by any chance? :)))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

http://animoscrypt.files.wordpress.com/2009/08/casanova.jpg
;D

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

omg. want. ::swoons::