dead man walking

[wytchcroft]

could have been that
dead man walking
turning to gold
shaking loose
that Lazarus lump

turning to gold
could have been that
new world, new planet
some plateau
some time

could have been that
sunrise and the cities
on a hot wave of neon
somewhere strange

electrical oceans
in which we bathe

like a dream
science fiction
dead man walking
with hands and rays
drifting into the future
on the back of the days

these hands
held their promise
could have been that
restless amazed.

Comments

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

Adore this. The repetition really works for me, especially "could have been that".

What I love most though is this expression, "restless amazed". I felt it and it left me breathless. :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

wow that was quick! thank you :))
this was just a doodle, sometimes no sense makes the most sense, to me :))

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

I like *doodles*. I tend to partake in them, as well. :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

ps - i haven't had a chance to catch up with everyone today, but i'll be dropping in on you tomorrow evening, see you then :))

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

You are too kind, my friend. Thank you. :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

pish! it will be my pleasure! :)))