Last piece

Apr. 15th, 2010 03:33 pm
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and there's sunlight
gold upon the ruined brick

this was once a castle
but the king took sick 

singing hurry up my horses
hurry up the men
half way round the world we go
and back again
.

....................................
posted a little early because i'm going out in a while.
thanks to everyone for the tremendous comments
and Mr Stapleton, this one is for you. :))

Date: 2010-04-15 02:48 pm (UTC)
med_cat: (Watson bookworm)
From: [personal profile] med_cat
A perfect conclusion to the trio of chess-themed poems :)

Date: 2010-04-15 02:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reginaclarejane.livejournal.com
"this was once a castle
but the king took sick..."

hm... i really like this line... there's so much of an undercurrent to it...

inspired pieces, my friend.
:)

Date: 2010-04-15 03:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] betsycontent.livejournal.com
excellent conclusion to the triplet. last verse was my favorite. sounded like it was an established nursery rhyme that had already stood the test of time. :)))

thanks a lot!

Date: 2010-04-15 07:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mr-stapleton.livejournal.com
my friend, it's another little gem. and - i'm certainly indebted to you :)

Date: 2010-04-16 01:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] inmyocean.livejournal.com
Bravo! I adore this one -- for the rhyme and for the opening two lines which took me some place. :):)

Date: 2010-04-16 04:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mr-stapleton.livejournal.com
dear friend, i've got your rhyme :) this concluding piece is like a breath indeed - light and inspirational. adorable! russian text is here:
http://mr-stapleton.livejournal.com/237710.html
thank you again very much!
yours, s.

Date: 2010-04-17 02:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bttrflyscar.livejournal.com
that ending is priceless.

Date: 2010-04-17 04:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] neversremedy.livejournal.com
I like the rhythm and imagery in this one.

Date: 2010-04-22 03:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] willowtreedance.livejournal.com
Another great piece.

You might have posted it early but I'm reading it late lol

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