walking the wild queen

[wytchcroft]

 

and later on we walk the wild queen home
the petals of her heart
with the wires exposed
she was born of water
we were stepping stones

all the breath scented air
all our candle light
dancing in between
the bishop and his bones

through the valley and its shadows
through the forest and its zones
pieces of machinery
singing as we go

nights under heaven
where the full moon shines
the wild queen leaves footprints  
footprints the colour of wine.

Comments

[med_cat]

This is really good! So was the other chess piece you posted recently :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

heee! thank you! :))

[med_cat]

You're welcome :)

chess piece

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

:)))

[reginaclarejane.livejournal.com]

um... whoa- how did i miss the first one?! blimey!
two very intriguing companion pieces. i love the surrealism and techno-feeling of these!
kudos, nic!
:)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

aw thanks regina, this one has gone through so many revisions it's just a relief to let it go! LOL! :))

[bttrflyscar.livejournal.com]

I freakin love your chess poems. I want to hump them. lol.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

be my guest darlin', LOL! :))

[bttrflyscar.livejournal.com]

LOL. finished. LOL.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

http://indolentdandy.net/fitzroyalty/wp-content/uploads/2009/01/kinski.jpg
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[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

Nice change in colour and feel/pace.

The first and last stanza in this are my favourite and I like that because it means a poem begins and ends well and it gives a piece an overall completed feeling.

:)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

thank you! :))
and that's nice to hear because the last verse took so long, went through so many versions - and i still wasn't too happy with it... so yes, relieved :))

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

Which poets &/or writers are you into, if you don't mind me asking? :)

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

You're so right, it could come down to being names upon names. I have a thing for Shakespeare, Eliot and Plath as well, to name a few we seem to have in common. :) Cummings and Blake are right there, high on my list, as well.

I don't believe anyone can compare themselves to another writer, even if the stylings are similar they can never be the same or of the exact calibre and it's ridiculous to hope for such a thing. Writers should just be themselves, in my opinion. It's the beauty of creation, finding another voice to add to the (growing) mix. :)

Again, you're lovely. It's people like you, Regina and the others I hold in esteem here in lj that help my writing grow. So, I thank you. :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

edit; i really don't know how to answer that, sorry. :(

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

You answered it well enough, my friend. You are too hard on yourself. Plus, I already replied. ;)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

and replied very nicely too! :D

ага!

[mr-stapleton.livejournal.com]

oh my friend, it's another great piece! i hope your travel across the board will continue :)

Re: ага!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

thank you! :))

[stoshagownozad.livejournal.com]

I see them marching!!!!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

ah Yu, i'm glad of that! :))

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

how can i not adore this? a beautiful piece. esp. loved "she was born of water, we were stepping stones." :)))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

i thought of you when i started these chess posts, i sort of hoped they would draw you out - it's so great to know you are still in contact with lj. all good wishes to you :)))

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

i'm still here, and flattered that you would bait me with such a lovely lure. :) now i must go find the other chess poem!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

:)))

[mr-stapleton.livejournal.com]

my dear wytch, i've attempted another translation of your fine art - here:
http://mr-stapleton.livejournal.com/237469.html
hope you like it :)
and - once again - thank you very much for your wonderful poetry!
yours, s.

Yry! :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

my friend, that is again the best reward i could ask for, thanks indeed :))

there is one final chess piece (!) to go.

[pointedview.livejournal.com]

I quite like it! The poem reminds me of Twin Peaks again - chess (Windom Earle), the wild queen born of water (Laura's body found washed up on shore), stepping stones (how she used those around her), valley and its shadows (the spirits of TP), the forest and its zones (the woods and Glastonbury Grove), pieces of machinery singing (the lumber mill), footprints the colour of wine (Laura's blood spilled as she's being taken to the train car). But that's just me.

It's just a coincidence of similar phrasing, but I mentally fit "walk the wild queen" into "wake the white queen:"

Cruxshadows - "Wake the White Queen" (Mirrormask)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

//I mentally fit "walk the wild queen" into "wake the white queen:"//

or indeed, Fire walk with Me.

:))

thanks for the kind comments and your insight! :))

[pointedview.livejournal.com]

Yes, FWWM for sure!

Thanks for sharing your writing! :)

[chalissa.livejournal.com]

Every line of this is good enough to quote back at you, so I'm not even going to bother. You're just... incredible.

...Did I say every line? I meant every WORD.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

oh sweet and silver tongue! :))

my lj experience is the poorer for you absence ;))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

youR absence, even.
oops!