dead man walking

[wytchcroft]

could have been that
dead man walking
turning to gold
shaking loose
that Lazarus lump

turning to gold
could have been that
new world, new planet
some plateau
some time

could have been that
sunrise and the cities
on a hot wave of neon
somewhere strange

electrical oceans
in which we bathe

like a dream
science fiction
dead man walking
with hands and rays
drifting into the future
on the back of the days

these hands
held their promise
could have been that
restless amazed.

Comments

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

Adore this. The repetition really works for me, especially "could have been that".

What I love most though is this expression, "restless amazed". I felt it and it left me breathless. :))

[stoshagownozad.livejournal.com]

lile in Metropolis!

[reginaclarejane.livejournal.com]

hey! really cool poem, my friend! i loved the futuristic feel of it- and this line in particular..."shaking loose
that Lazarus lump"- that is brill, sir nic...
this one goes into my secret stash of favorites...;)

[java-fiend.livejournal.com]

I really like this one. I love that 5th stanza most of all. Really well done.

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

love it :)