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[wytchcroft]

she brushes back her sleeves with a doctor's ease
clasping the documents to her knees
she's moving in rhythm
to the swing of the train

hardly moving at all
she's pulling the cord

it's the click of a heel
the flick of a fringe
some kind of humility
pressing in on her

did she get that job?
did the interview go well?
did the snarls of the ambulance
give her something to sell?

and that old Spanish bell
tolling her gone
a ripple in the fabric of tomorrow
could be the latest fashion

she's difficult to read
and it's hard to believe
she could be invisible
as she brushes back her sleeve
with a doctor's ease

and it doesn't hurt her
to leave

some kind of humility
pressing in on her

up the escalator
and down again
she's moving in rhythm
to the swing of the train.



this is riffin' off from chalissa's post on the 7 deadly sins
and thanks to daysofjune for inspiration as well :))

Comments

[chalissa.livejournal.com]

Oh wow, only one sin and it already inspired something like this? O.o Amazing! I ought to get going on the other six...

[avosurt.livejournal.com]

you good at inspired))

[mr-stapleton.livejournal.com]

it's fascinating, my friend!!!!
i just couldn't stop myself. translation will appear in few minutes...

translation

[mr-stapleton.livejournal.com]

that's it
thank you very much once more for great pleasure!!!!

[kodzujoro.livejournal.com]

wytchcroft is it yours? you are real poet. it's wonderful poetry. it's look like poetry by masters of nonsense verse a little espesially by metre.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

hey thanks! :)) yes, i am a great lover of such things as nonsense - i am told i often talk it LOL!

but seriously, that is a great compliment from you, and i appreciate it, truly - nonsense verse and its writers... well i am a HUGE devotee. thanks again :))

some credit must go to mr alfred hitchcock too!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

my friend, you will end up in translator's rehab!!!! :)))

Re: translation

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

and thank you!:))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

that is very kind of you :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

*smooch* and i hope you will! :))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

and now my head is swollen again!:))
http://mr-stapleton.livejournal.com/191844.html

[betsycontent.livejournal.com]

love this. i can feel the tram swaying back and forth. the chorus is brilliant, esp. love the line: "she brushes back her sleeves with a doctor's ease." write more lyrics and poems! :)

[kodzujoro.livejournal.com]

mr Weil (Weill or Weyl (Wail), Vail?)(sorry for wrong spelling)
thank you very much for link. some time ago i was interesting in Edward Lear’s limericks a little and translated as well.
translation by mr-stapleton is very good.
about credit to mr alfred hitchcock, yes one can feel imperceptible atmosphere of thriller.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

ah, mr stapleton is a fine writer himself :)

and thanks again!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

thank you my friend! :))

[mr-stapleton.livejournal.com]

in translator's purgatory more likely ;-)

[rgkot.livejournal.com]

nice!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

thank you!:))

[daysofjune.livejournal.com]

This is beautiful :) Very vivid!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

cheers! :)

[avosurt.livejournal.com]

hopefully

[sidherian.livejournal.com]

Yay :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

back at ya! :))