they

[wytchcroft]

When they came for her
at the knocking gate
did you give her away?
or did she fade...
... like a radio wave

                                  you're too stubborn
                                  you're too stubborn for that

oh whisper a pardon
these impossible saints
with their heads on a plate
listen to those ghosts
at the knocking gate

                                  surely you're too stubborn for that
                                  too stubborn
                                  to

                     fade
like a radio wave
give that dial a twist
you must try to resist

                                  too stubborn 
                                  not to
                   
                                  live

you must try to live

winds will come
as is their way
banging at the city gate

      don't give her away

                                  live

      like a radio wave 
 
      oh don't give her away

                                  live.


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that was the last of 3 linked but tangential pieces.

Comments

[rebeccawilde.livejournal.com]

That was powerful, artful, and beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks for sharing. :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

such a lovely comment! thank you :)))

[rebeccawilde.livejournal.com]

My pleasure, as always...

It really is great. I hope you don't mind, but I printed it out... :)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

mind? i'm bloody chuffed! :))

[alex-kraine.livejournal.com]

Simply lost in words. Your experiments with poetic rhymes and measure seem to be yielding fruits of striking quality! And I love that, really!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

i'm taken aback! that's very nice of you Alex, thanks indeed! :))

Well...

[alex-kraine.livejournal.com]

It's just another intellectual etude -
Harvesting storm in the northern latitude;
Being a poet means a solemn solitude
But I guess, you are too stubborn for that, dude!

Sowing wind of good taste is the noblest task
That should be done from dawn to dusk,
Say, we'll have to make it a general norm
That then will save us in the coming storm!

All right, we're stubborn but noblesse oblige
Let's make men better not only for prestige
How many secret worlds are waiting us
Hidden in the surface cracks of a Ming Vase?

:)))

Re: How many secret worlds are...

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

answer: FORTY TWO!!!!!!:)))


(that was a genius response Alex, thank you, LOL!)

Re: How many secret worlds are...

[alex-kraine.livejournal.com]

It took you less than a million years. Ergo ou can discover the literary (not numerical) Answer to the Ultimate Question of Life, the Universe, and Everything much faster than Deep Thought. ;)

42 literary meanings .

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

ah but 42... Lewis Carroll got there first.

What a waste of material! :)

[alex-kraine.livejournal.com]

Like that? :)

"...He had forty-two boxes, all carefully packed,
With his name painted clearly on each:
But, since he omitted to mention the fact,
They were all left behind on the beach..."

There's no limits to perfection! Charles Dodgson was close, very close but we should not be afraid of competinge with him, should we?

bingo!

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

and as for competition -indeed, he would have encouraged it :))

[avosurt.livejournal.com]

" you're too stubborn for that" - super. I like beautiful, correct rhythm and unusual words for his chosen.
is this - yours or somebody else?)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

thank you :)) and, just me, playing with words.

[stoshagownozad.livejournal.com]

playing so well!
best gifts of life are often "just a play"
good to know such a player:)))

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

what a nice thing to say - thank you! :))

[reginaclarejane.livejournal.com]

Wow, Nic... very nice indeed. I esp. liked this... "winds will come
as is their way
banging at the city gate

don't give her away"
It's that last line particularly that gets me...
You have such a poet's heart, my friend- truly.
:)

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

hey thanks!
your own work gives me such pleasure i'm glad you found some here :))

[neversremedy.livejournal.com]

Wow. Thank you. ^_^

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

it means a lot to me that you liked this particular piece - thanks!:))

*hugs up!*

[neversremedy.livejournal.com]

*hugs* I love your writing, sweetheart.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

i think this piece shows your influence :))

[eila.livejournal.com]

That may explain why I'm so drawn to it. ^_^

Everytime I read it, it tugs at me a bit.

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

fab! :))

[eila.livejournal.com]

Fab like you. ^_^

*smooch*

[wytchcroft.livejournal.com]

*blush* :))

[eila.livejournal.com]

Now we're even. We've made one another blush. ;)